Very good feedback, it's appreciated :)
The dialogue in quotations without a speaker is meant to be intentional internal dialogue between Goober (Noah) and the AI, distinct from his internal thoughts/narrator. Is there a more intuitive way to indicate this? In contrast the rest of the spoken dialogue doesn't use quotes
It's understandable with the challenges of balancing a career and the novel. I'd prefer for you to not worry about the expectations of others or keeping to a regular release tempo from when you were writing full time. The most important thing I think is to find a realistic balance to fit creating this novel in your life in a way that won't burn you out and gives you enjoyment to do. The only obligation you should feel is to look after yourself.
This VN is a nice and comforting world to immerse myself in for a while. Quite enjoying it so far.
One thing that really confuses me is why Sam doesn't reveal his origins to any of the love interests even though things are developing. All the teachers know already and I think everyone would be receptive. Seems strange to fall in love and still be holding a huge secret back for seemingly no reason.
Filter sounds good, but limit it to minor tweaks and alterations. If implementing a content filter means significantly compromising a route to accommodate, it would be better to just disable that particular route. It would be a shame to undermine an intended story in an attempt to please everyone.
If I lose out on 25% of routes because of my kink preferences that sounds fine. I'd rather that than have 100% bland stories.
It was unexpected for a demo to be able to evoke such a range of emotions in me already. Reading that blew me away. I'm glad there's more to come because I really need to see what the future holds for Lucian.
I notice there is no romance tag, is there any plan for that in the later story? I have some hopes for what might happen with certain characters, but can also see a potentially different outcome.
I was wondering if you were referring to a specific moment in the story so far. I'm definitely keen for Criator exploring the story of ancient foes and those caught between them. Maybe everything isn't as clearly light/dark, just as you indicate. Nolan sees a light in Nicolai after all and Nolan is plagued by his own darkness perhaps.
This VN is off to a pretty good start. Effective use of music, sound effects and good backgrounds. The setting is interesting and from this intro you can already see some of the challenges to be faced. MC's place in the world is quite odd and unexpected, and will obviously factor heavily in those challenges.
