The writing is fine but kind of started to feel like a lot of text between the turns of battle. The theme works, but didn't feel particularly dramatic anymore than the main character failing their goal- which didn't feel very consequential either. Like I say, the readability was good and premise was enjoyable- a three way cave battle between Snatchers, Squids and Rats? Fun!

No one expects the rats to literally be in the walls... go figure.

You've got a cool idea here, and I really liked the twist with the Ratmen showing up unexpectedly. It’s a neat way to throw a wrench in the works, and it definitely fits the theme. Some of the action was a bit tricky to follow, though—maybe just slow down a bit and let the scenes breathe. You've got something solid here, and with a little more polish, it could be even better. Keep at it!