Thanks for your useful feedabck, Gritfish! I was toying around with that -- whether to display stats etc -- but I wasn't sure whether it would feel too heavy-handed. I guess I was likely to err on one side or the other :) I'll definitely be working in more player feedback now, but I want to keep in in the theme of the book. Thanks again :)

I agree with HandwrittenAnthony, there's a lot going on here. It's a really impressive twine entry - I would have loved to have seen that player state reflected a bit in a title or something. Has the beginnings of something like "the yawhg" in it, but at the moment it feels like a lot of those loops don't terminate once you've exhausted your options for the day.

Thanks all for your feedback and support! :)
I am already continuing to improve this, as I found a few bugs and balancing issues AFTER uploading (whoops). I hope that those of you who enjoyed it will continue to follow its development after the Jam! 

With each next game made in Twine I appreciate it more and more ;) Solid text-game, aesthetical. Solid work ;]

After playing around a bit, you come to realise there is A LOT of stuff going on under the hood of this Twine game. Can't wait to see how the ballroom "battle" shapes up. :D

Nice work! Good writing, true to the story, and I especially like the font/formatting, made it very easy to read.

The power of imagination is stronger than any visual effects computers can generate,  and your story can surely summon it.

Thanks for the nice feedback, all!

And thanks for the featuring, Jupiter :)

Nice texted-based! I included it in part 3 of my Public Domain Jam compilation video series, if you'd like to take a look :) http://youtu.be/wBFnNe-QQn0

I always love a good text-based game. It's just like reading a book --letting my mind run free, except it has the power to endlessly change and evolve in front of me! Good job! :)

Very well-written. It felt good having the option to spurn somebody in-game.