First I want to say thank you Peppekz for your notes on my other (non wolf jam) vn back in May.
I am trying harder to keep my sentences shorter as a result. Please bear with me! It's hard to break a lifetime habit.
I have great respect for multilingual authors! I couldn't imagine writing a vn in anything other than my language.
There were a couple instances where I had trouble understanding the intent of your words. I had to read some lines two or three times before it clicked. Those were, however, few and far between.
You certainly took a creative route in regard to theme on multiple levels. There's a physical, a mental, and an emotional aspect.
You also focused on an underrepresented group in the fvn community. I know it would be difficult for me to do so, as it is outside my personal experience.
If you do decide in the future to expand on the story, it would be nice to have additional flashback graphics. I would like to see more before the union of wolf and mushroom.
I do realize the fungus could sense what was happening, but not truly understand. Since it couldn't 'see', simple colorful silhouette visuals could be appropriate.
I know you were busy with multiple projects, so it limited the time you had to add elements. I also feel that we are so accustomed to longer novels that shorter stories seem underdeveloped by comparison. I think that's something all of us are dealing with right now!
I look forward to seeing what else you come up with in the future!