As another has noted, it wasn't clear that the character being controlled is reading a letter. On my third playthrough - there are plenty of clues about that, more observant people will notice, but I think these are sort of details that a lot of players will skim through while looking for parts of text that are most important for the main story. A different, more handwritey font for letter contents would probably help.
Other than that, looks like a great atmosphere, and that cook's life is intriguing, very good main character material.