I love the look of this one!! the style is supremely unique and effective. I felt like I could tell what everything was and it all felt cohesive in the story and world. Your world building is also really interesting. It kind of reminded me of The Neverending Story! Really nostalgic and with a tragic undertone to it. I made a bit of a mistake and accidentally redownloaded the game folder so I lost my save!! I was a good chunk into it. So I have NOT finished it completely yet, but I will circle back once the lost-save-file wound feels less painful. Just a silly mistake on my part.
I think the only big negative I found was just the grammar and spelling issues. I really wish that RM had an internal spellcheck system, this is something that really irks me. But with so much story telling and text in this game I worry you're doing yourself a disservice not maybe getting someone to beta read it or spell check it. I loved your world building and character writing, it was just plain distracting that there were so many mix ups of the different "there"'s, for example.
Always always love and appreciate original art!! And especially original concepts and story ideas. I hope you do more of these jams in the future!