Overall I think you have a lot of creative ideas here, and I really admire how bold you are with your experimental ideas and i think in turn they translate very well, as I think i did understand a lot of what you were going for here. My challenge to you is to really think about the artistic intent here and how you will translate that to the audience, you do explain that some of the choices you make are there but without any accompanying media sometimes the finer details of exactly why you do something can get lost, and while I really liked a lot of your ideas I found it a bit harder to fit them into the context of your greater story here, so even if you have a very strong idea of how everything fits together make sure you can explain that to a listener. Even if its just a blurb saying "i want this to make you feel this", it well help the listener understand why something is done more, even if the point is to make you feel uncomfortable/unnerved!
Overall pretty strong, I know my feedback may read a little harsh but I think its kind of impossible to make any feedback about artistic intent not seem daunting, think of it less as "i think this is bad" and more "i want to understand your choices more", because ultimately I do still really like this!! Keep it up :3