The writing in this–and the setup–is quite creepy. Especially for such a short game, I thought that aspect was very effective.
A couple of notes:
- I found the possible reference to Monty Python in the failure ending a little off in tone. Or maybe I’m imagining it as a reference?
- I did notice a few typos and grammatical oddities, so another round of revision might be helpful. These didn’t detract from my enjoyment of trying to figure out the puzzle, though.