This was super interesting, I'm always down for some fun creepy horror-ish moments and I really like what you are doing here, and how you chose to express the story! My one feedback is to not push back from being intense, harsher instrumentation, thicker and more chaotic chords, things like that can really help drive that unease off the charts for something like this, so pretty much echoing what foxwings said. This was really cool though overall!