Thanks, Coombsy! I appreciate that! And yeah, making the conversational tone flow naturally while keeping it clear was a struggle for me, since so many clarifiers Id normally put in had to be weighed against the scene descriptors for the shorter runtime, and cutting them felt ROUGH. I did what I could, especially in the end with Joachim & Anterron curtly referencing each other in each exchange, but I know there were some parts, especially with each talking to their lieutenants that was tougher to catch.
Thank you for your constructive feedback, and for the compliments! This has been a blast, the community has been so welcoming and I cant wait to join the next Writing Jam with you all!
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Yeah it’s interesting what we consider fodder for the trash with such a small word count, right? Using just the essentials to me really establishes a writers voice, and yours is wonderful.
It’s been a lot of fun, right? From the writing, right up to the critiquing of others work, been a real blast. Hope to see you on the next Writing Jam!