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Hey dude! You've crafted a gripping and intense story that really captures the harsh reality of a grimdark future. I loved the psychological depth you gave to Darad and the way you portrayed the punishment battalion's dire situation. The tension was palpable, and the twist with Myles was heartbreaking. With just a bit more polish on the transitions, this story would shine even brighter. Keep up the great work—your knack for storytelling is clear!

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Thanks! Yeah, I wish I had given it a day and done a rewrite. There's one paragraph in the middle that kept me up last night. Lesson learned. Thank you for your kind words.