Hey thank ya so much for the time ya dedicated to read the vn so far. I see your point in the art style and I'm trying to get better, my style it's like a anime and cartoon mixture, so im trying to make it look better and recently trying do a more layer for the shading part. Has for the grammar thank ya for understanding, I've done big check and even are correcting some early mistakes from build one and adding things I jumped a thing do to having classes at the time of some builds. I'm happy ya liking the pacing so far, I decided to have this figth to also had a bit of backstory not just for James, but the world building lore and individual characters too, because having the protagonist always read the information in books would be tideous for the reader and too had a bit of tension to the plot, Also thank yes ya are right I should demontrate how James trains everyday and migh start doing now like ya suggested, I added the pizza and burger part, to be they discovering human foods and have a good time with friends :3. And yes too James knowing that now sounds kinda funny haha, I will change that for sure xD and I didn't mention all the continents on Earth cuz i didn't find the need to add that but I can always do that. About the stomach thing, SPOILER ALERT- that was supposed to be a promonition of the future- Their first meet I kinda rush the things a bit, as I said earlier about thinking of the plot can be hard do to exterior problems xp but yeah was a bit rushed, and don't wory more of the bad guy treat will be explore in future builds :3, but this one another problem might happen ;3
Yes, of course. Just to be clear, I totally understand what you're doing and why! I think your ideas are all good and I can see why they're in there. It's just the fine tuning of how to implement them that could be improved for future builds.
Like James having a lighthearted meal with friends while introducing them to human food. Good idea, but would pizza really be the thing he'd choose as a somewhat professional martial artist? Or perhaps he could only give them pizza while clearly stating that he's not eating any because of his strict diet or something (or did he already do something like that? I can't remember).
Same for using the upcoming duel as a method to introduce more backstory and lore while also building up tension. Good idea, but why a sword fight instead of boxing or wrestling? Both kinds of duels would make sense in this setting but the second one gives James more of a realistic chance.
Having a premonition to introduce the villain and add some mystery is also a good idea. But you should think about how this affects the characters at that moment.
I'm sure you get the point by now. Your ideas are good, but you could think a bit more about how exactly to implement them the best. Again, no need to change things you've already sunk tons of effort into! (aside from the small/easy issues, maybe). I'm not saying that you have to do this and that to make it better or anything like that. My advice would just be to explore the options you have for implementing each idea and then choose the one that fits best with the characters and setting.
Oh, and don't overwork yourself. We all understand the struggle of balancing school/work with hobbies. There's no need to rush or stress yourself out.
Thank ya, comments like this make me happy, all the support it's helpfull, I want to bring a good story at same time I do something different in the furry visual novels :3, I appreciate all the time y dedicated reading and writting this comments, and good news im almost finishing writting the scritp in vsc, just the sound effects, some music and 2 arts left for it to be done after checking any mistakes ;3 and don't worry i like to read what people think of the story and would like to here what are your theories so far if ya have any ofc.