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Tanxui120 days ago

Hey, it's sad to hear that you let player feedback influence you too much. Though I wonder what they told you exactly. What would the game look like otherwise?

Here's my opinion: I like AVNs with great stories and this one didn't really meet the mark for me. It feels like a constant alternation between a problem being presented and that same problem being solved. There's barely any struggle or twists.

And then there's excessive power creep. None of the power the MC gains really feels earned and it happens way too quickly, which prbly is a consequence of the first problem.

Then there's little foreshadowing or any predictability of what could happen. The magic system is soft and all I can do is watch as stuff happens that I just have to accept.

I liked the characters but there are too many LIs here which waters down the bond with each of them. The lewds are okay but often feel very basic and are over before you know it.

So this game didn't scratch my itch for a great story. But that's okay, this is your first work after all and honestly I'm quite spoiled by the high caliber AVNs. I still appreciate your efforts and I'm sure that you're now more skilled than when you started.

I'm considering to check out your other games as well but I'm unsure whether their stories will intrigue me. Based on my feedback, would you recommend them to me?

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N2TheFire120 days ago(+2)

See, now THIS is a negative review that I can stand behind. People should read yours and take notice. Imagine, writing a negative review without resorting to name calling, shaming, or humiliating the dev, glorious! Thank you for your post!
With that said, to answer your question... first of all, Serenity definitely suffers from everything you mentioned. In fact, nothing you've said here is anything I haven't heard before. I know that adversity in the story is resolved too quickly. It is something I took note of when I started writing Last Human. Considering that you posted in the Serenity page, I'm wondering now if you have tried Serenity Chapter 2? FWIW, I believe that certain aspects of my development do improve in chapter 2, and probably more so in Last Human.

Each of my games still suffer from various things that random people dislike. I mean, let's face it, I am by no means calling myself a professional writer or even a professional graphic artist. But I do learn from proper, creative criticism when it is given. And I have tried to apply that into my work as I have grown.

Also, I want to reply directly to the first sentence in your post. To be fair, I think you might be referring to something I posted a while ago. I do not let feedback influence me anymore (to a degree). When a person tries my visual novels, then takes the time to write an honest review, I DO listen. I have a spreadsheet of notes with sentences that were taken right from those reviews. Many of them I've already highlighted as mostly completed.

Of course, none of this bears any weight on Serenity (chapter 1) because, honestly it desperately needs some rewriting - which I have plans to do later. As well as updating the graphics and animations. I've learned a ton of things about graphics that I didn't know then.

Finally, yes... I'm quite guilty of having some short sex scenes. But if you play Last Human, you should notice some improvement there.

I really dislike having to answer someone who asks me "should I play your game?" - I'll explain why... I believe that you should play any game that looks at all interesting to you. Give the dev a shot (not just me, but any). If you post your thoughts in a kind manner as you did here, you've done the community a service - if that dev takes notice and tries to improve based on your ideas about his game, and if more people would do that, I believe you would see a lot of better work out there.

Anyway, I'm rambling now. But thanks again for your post. I hope you will sit down, relax, and take a shot at Serenity Chapter 2 (it only has 3 episodes at this point) as well as Last Human (now at 4 episodes). If I can turn you around with at least one of those, that would make my day. If not, well... I tried and hopefully you'll come back one day to see if I'm doing things better.

All love, ...Fire

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Tanxui120 days ago

Thanks for your reply! Sorry that the player base gave you such a hard time. People can be cruel; shitting on something we don't like is easier than writing constructive criticism.

I didn't play your other games, only this one. The reason I asked "should I play your other games?" is that the list of games I want to try is long. If you would've told me that this writing style is intentional I would've put the "not for me" stamp on it and moved on to other games instead. But since you agree with me, even saying that this game could use an overhaul, I'm compelled to try them!

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