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This is genuinely excellent, I really enjoyed reading it.

You managed to fit a ton in without any of the pages feeling crowded. The tight NPC descriptions are especially well-done.

Only suggestions:

  • Differentiate the guns more and open them up beyond fighter/rogue. In a setting that's basically guns-only, locking half the classes from using guns hurts the feel. I think you could get far by adding more guns and splitting them differently. Obviously you were space-limited here, but if you go back I'd expand that. Something like:
    • Fighter: Carbine, rifle, revolver, derringer
    • Priest: Rifle, derringer
    • Rogue: Revolver, derringer
    • Wizard: Derringer
  • The functionality of gunner badges feels weird. They represent your skill, but you just buy them? And as only fighters/rogues can use them, this puts fighters/rogues at +6 AC compared to priests/wizards for most combats here. Not sure what, but I think some refinement is needed there.
  • I found the force-field functionality a bit unclear, especially on the aliens stat-block. Not so unclear I'd have trouble running it, but I think I'd actually be just making up half the rules.

Anyways, that's my effort at constructive criticism. Excellent adventure.

Thank you for your thoughtful review!

I'll definitely release a full version without the eight-page limit and expand the content for the other classes. The gunner badge was intended as a humorous quirk of this strange world. It's not a reflection of your skill, but rather a unique aspect of the Weird West setting. I'll clarify this in the full version and add similar mechanics for the other classes.

Regarding the force fields, they're designed to interact with Arthur's pistol. If you have the pistol and magic bullets, you can destroy the force fields. I'll make this clearer in the full version.

Once again, thank you for your time and feedback. I appreciate your comments greatly!