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Visually the game is great, both the renders and UI design. There's even a music player, nice! What unfortunately kills it for me is the pacing; most dialogues are too long for my taste. I'm usually patient and don't play AVNs just for the porn but there's not enough (non-sexual) exciting stuff happening to keep me on board.

I do like that the dialogue has explanations for words that the reader might not know, saves me a Google search! I would suggest that instead of annotated metric conversions you just have a setting that naturally changes all dialogue to the reader's preferred measurement system. But maybe it doesn't happen often enough to really matter, idk.

An impressive first release indeed! Though the pacing is either bad or just not for me. Still, best of luck with your brand new project!

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Thank you for the feedback, Tanxui! Unfortunately with STELLA being a story without any sci-fi or fantasy elements, I think it is more difficult to create any interesting "hooks" aside from well-written characters and interactions to keep people engaged. Where I lack in a setting without those fantastical elements, I hope I can make up for with more deeply-written, realistic, and lovable character dynamics and personalities. 

With this being  the introduction of the game, its world, and its characters, I hope I can write future updates with more engaging and enjoyable situations, conversations, and dialogue in general.

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Thanks for your reply! Yes, it's easier to write exciting stories for fantastical settings, but that doesn't seem to be the problem here. I just think that many conversations get boring after a while. They are either too long or not interesting enough.

I'm not a writer but let me give you some potentially irresponsible advice: I dare you to reduce all dialogues with Crystal and the MC's friend to half the length. Just focus on what's most important and see what happens.

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Came here to say the same thing. The conversations between the MC and some of the other characters are way too long and not gripping enough, especially with the MC's friend and Crystal. It could use a bit of trimming, imho.