I can totally see this style as an alternative take on the original. I would definitely vibe with it! The composition goes really hard, definitely one of my favourites.
I wonder how often you listened to the original before this, because I do hear some similarities to the original (mainly in the beginning of your submission). But might've been something you aimed for since you mentioned this being used as a 'rework'.
One thing to note is that the transition at 0:55 breaks the rythm a bit too much in my opinion. Nevertheless, an amazing submission!