I really enjoyed the story you told with your pieces and how smoothly it transitions between each section. I especially enjoyed the chimes on the shards of air section. It seemed to me that you leaned pretty heavily into drawing longer chords, and while the orchestration, dynamics, and tone of the chords are nice, I feel like some variation in rhythms of the chords or melody could add some more interest to your piece. I think pretty much everything else about this work is well crafted. Overall, really nice cinematic composing you've done here.