I definitely welcome all criticism on my writing style. I am not a native speaker, and neither am I a writer, so these are really helpful to keep in mind for the future! Also, I'm not sure if you'd count that, but the Lend-a-tail is kind of a cybernetic enhancement item thing. I was really proud of that one hahaha
I have played A LOT of Heroes of Might and Magic III (aka the best HoMM game), so that might be an inspiration I wasn't even aware of!
edit: I just tried out your suggestion with cutting wills entirely and I agree - sentences sound better. There was maybe a single sentence where I'd keep it! that's nice to learn!