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i appreciate the runes as a way to interact with a faction (the golem) who otherwise wouldn't be very interactable. having said that, i was a little surprised not to find any faction (or patron maybe) suggestions for Lum. we almost know more about Demelza than Lum, you know? how's she feel about wandering ghouls? and about Xng? just a few words for the gm to riff with.

that aside, the story reads well and seems pretty simple to run with the book open after one read. even so, i would have loved to have a little mini-map per page or so to better feel my way through room connections and break up walls of text. speaking of the map, a few of the more empty rooms (30 + 29, 14 + 16 + 17) seem like they could be combined without destroying the vibe so players can focus on finding Lum and control panel hijinks. "kill your darlings!" the amateur on the internet says, right? well, i only pick at nits because there aren't any big flaws. :)