I think you've created an original and intriguing setting. It evokes images of South American salt flats, the Potosí mines, conquistadors and colonial powers, and all in a tone of magical realism, populated by surreal beings. It brought to mind atypical images in ttrpgs, but with a lot of narrative potential.
It took me a while to get into the story, perhaps I would suggest some changes in the structure, but beyond that, I find it very evocative and unique.
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I am very glad I was able evoke that history and magical realism successfully, and you saying so makes me feel I'm on the right track. I am definitely thinking about ways to prioritize how the story is laid out for ease of play, and organizing all the information better so it's not so hard to pull the threads together on the fly. Thank you for taking the time to read my work and tell me your thoughts!