The lighting is a little off especially for the first two screenshots, the banner one is much better.
Anyway your story or at minimal the genre of your game should surface in a demo. Right now it's hard to even tell which genre this game belongs to. I strongly suggest you rewrite the introduction.
I am guessing it's some sort of horror / psycho thriller with perhaps some paranormal, I could be wrong but the main thing is players shouldn't be left guessing...
Still I'll give this a try when there are a few more updates, all the best in your development and good luck!