It really hurt my ears when it started because of how loud it is.
I think having a buildup to the loudness would have been nice since it can work but the entire song is just too loud right now.
I also think it might be a little too simplistic because there isn't much in the way of melody. It's mostly just bass and percussion which can be fine but for how simple and loud it is it just doesn't work.
The voices at the end were a nice touch and I think they were the highlight because they weren't super loud.