Good job! For a first time in rock/metal that is not that far off. It gives me vibes of early '00s games a bit, which is weirdly nostalgic. I feel like I played a game with similar soundtrack :D
A bit of feedback - with drums for rock/metal the baseline would be kick on 1 & 3 and snare on 2 & 4. Obviously you can play around with kicks, snares are bit more difficult to pull off differently. Fill spaces with hihats (not on same dynamic level, most commonly used would be strong-weak) as 8ths and you have a great base to build up from.
With that going from closed to open hihats will be an easy verse/chorus distinction.
Seeing that you admitted to drums being your weak point I figured you would find this helpful, hope you do!