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The game was really good up until a certain point and then it just jumped the shark; Sally immediately going into Kien's apartment and grabbing him by the neck after her call with the locksmith came out of nowhere. It broke the immersion and took me out of the story. That's just not how people behave in the real world. 

I understand her getting angry at him, maybe even going over to his place to give him a piece of her mind (although that seems unwise after what she just learned on the phone), but for her to start choking him out appears unhinged and goofy. Maybe if you want to put a scene like that in the game it should occur for later after a few more incidents of Kien showing problematic behavior. Everything up to this point has characterized Sally as someone who wants to avoid conflict, not a person who resorts to violence when right away.

Edit: I've read some of the comments on here and found out the game is complete. It really gives the impression of being a demo. I would seriously advise working on the ending a bit. It just doesn't feel complete, even for a cliffhanger. 

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Hey there!

Thank you so much for playing it and for your critique! Feedback is very important to me.

Putting myself in the shoes of the player/reader, I believe I can understand what you described.

I tried to make the two characters believable, but I also gave myself full creative freedom to make them way more intense than what you would expect for socially acceptable behavior. 

Kien is a Yandere character. Sallie seems to be a person who avoids conflict (exactly as you described), but who experiences a great deception by someone she trusted and was developing a crush on. Her unexpected reaction to the truth is part of something that we also didn't know about her - she also has a dark side.

I'm sorry if you didn't like the ending. I know cliffhangers can be frustrating... I used to hate them when I was younger, until I found the charm in how they made me think of so many theories! lol

I hope you still had fun with the game! 😄