Poetry like this requires a better understanding and commanding of the language that I'm afraid the author hasn't quite mastered yet. The first game had the right balance between prose and readability and I would personally prefer a return to that.
Right now, it feels like the author is trying too hard to be "deep" and the end result is just complete gibberish. There is a difference between something "sounding right" in your head because you possess the insight and context of what you're trying to convey, and expecting your readers to do the same.
As it stands, the most we can do here is appreciate the art, which is lovely, but that alone does not make a game. the universe and lore are right up my alley, as i love dark fantasies and this kind of romance, but it still needs a lot of work. Still, if the author managed once they can do it again. I look forward to that day.