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Thanks for describing this further! And don’t worry, we’re always open to any type of feedback.

I might need to change some of the writing at the beginning of the game, because it sounds like the way his situation was portrayed to you is a bit different to what I intended.

I think you’re on to something and the “familiar dull headache” line in particular gives off more “idle and long-lived existence” than it should. I might try something along the lines of “A familiar dull ceiling hangs above my head, accompanied by a pounding headache that’s quickly threatening to become just as familiar.” (I can definitely still improve that more)

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Yes I think there is a bit of a contradiction at the beginning and your changes to fix that sound good.

If you do update the dialogue I would definitely try it out with some new players and see what they think. I may be just be projecting my own state of idleness lol.