Hey there! I really liked your submission, although, its not so much that you made very different song, I can see that working I think the painting itself asks almost for a story, my issue here was a bit on the emotional side, the last song didn't get the response from me that I expected, not that its not good(probably my favorite), but I think that it would be more impactful by itself
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Yo muttzilla, thanks for the feedback! Glad you really liked the track, even if it didnt give the emotional response that was expected. I think for me I wanted it to create something that felt more exciting for the conclusion, but I can see why it might not be what is emotionally expected. If u don't mind me asking so I can learn and improve my writing, what emotional response did the pieces before set you up for/what were u expecting to feel?
Certainly :)
From what I took from your interpretation, the last song would be a grand finale boss which you overcome, and I never felt that.
The final harmony is of accomplishment, all good, but I never got that feeling of "grandeur" / victory, it was more like a level mid way, which could be what you were going for just fine, but the piece before is so tense and "heavy" I felt the last song would be asking for something else, something "more", more threat maybe, felt a bit underwhelming.
As I said it probably is my favorite, honestly I think it would stand out more as a standalone it has a lot to offer already in itself, with the other tracks there I'm expecting some continuity, even if different styles, the narrative should be present and I feel it was not quite there.
Hope this feedback is helpful, take care :3