Damn you, Else. Why you gotta make me feel, man? Ahh, ahh, konayachi + else = bliss. It's funny cuz Alli was being all sad in the start and I was like "Man, Konayachi plus Else is pure bliss." GOD I LOVE YOUR WRITING AAAAAA (The fluffing "ah yes, I can feel the doppler effect on the vehicles" bahahhahahah) The characters and their interactions... The slap comedy... The friends totally immersed in themselves forgetting about the world outside... I recently had a moment like that, but instead of running in the rain it was running in a street, man, so damn good.
Ah, add a gallery!!! I really wanted the title screen without the buttons... It makes for a great wallpaper!
My favs are Kael and Alli. I thought we'd get a cute scene with each participant, but there wasnt one for revka, was there? Xander reminds me a lot of someone I know heh. "Yap" hahah
The foreshadowing to the hills scares me... I appreciated the music, btw
Typos:
"As the three began to pack up and leave" not really a typo, but like, which 3?? There are 4 people, why just 3???? WHO DIDNT PACK UP???
"there's a man who was listening intently." Shouldn't it be "there was"?
"I'm stuck in this cycle of constantly" Shouldn't it be "I was"? This also happens in that one letter "I feel like I'm stuck in a limbo,"... coincidence, I think not.
"It's too much pressure to draw things the way it is." Shouldn't it be "the way they are"?
"There's no way she'll" Shouldn't it be "she would"?
"and somehow forgot there are other people" Shouldn't it be "forget"?
"busyness" Shouldn't it be "Business"?
"What would Nate say if he's here?" Shouldn't it be "if he was here?"?
"If we do, then we'll be considered gods." Shouldn't it be "If we did, then we'd be considered gods."?
"He looked at me with those eyes-" Shouldn't it be "- his eyes" or removing "- eyes were"?
"I hope that we could be a home to you, Allison." Shouldn't it be "can be a home"?
"(When was the last time I feel so safe" Shouldn't it be "felt"?
"I thought there's finally another girl" Shouldn't it be "There'd finally be"?
"I haven't receive any" Shouldn't it be "received"?
"if many people are after his" Shouldn't it be "were"?
"doesn't like talking about his personal life." Shouldn't it be "didn't like to talk about"?
"The action I wished I've done," Shouldn't it be "I wished I'd done"?
"feeley-feeley" Shouldn't it be "feely-feely"?
"And since my dreams have been" Shouldn't it be "had been"?
"Is that what Xander's like back then?" Shouldn't it be "Xander was like"?
"I guess doing something you love" Shouldn't it be "does make a difference" or "something I love"?
"make sure you walk home with someone of blend in crowded places" lol what
"Words that I longed to hear, but I just didn't expect them to say it so suddenly." Shouldn't the "it" be removed?
MY PROBLEMS ARE NOT GONNA GET THE BETTER OF MEEEEE!!! HECK YEAH!
Terima kasih banyak! (Tryna learn indo lol)