This was fascinating! You picked great assets to use, and you work with them very efficiently. The elements that you created directly (I imagine?) do a lot, too: the 'halo' behind Haydee immediately intrigued me, for instance, and it was very cool to see the script offer a couple of lines to contextualise it, and then see it used later to tell us about Haydee's state of mind. (If mind is even the right word for talking about angels, &c &c.)
I wasn't quite sure about the phrase 'twain ropes' (definitely not 'twin ropes'?); I suspect 'a shit pay' would be better as either 'a shit salary', or 'a shit paycheck' (in NA spelling), or just 'shit pay'; and in one line, 'It's shell' probably ought to read 'Its shell'. But those are the most minor of nitpicks, and I am mentioning them because there weren't any larger issues. Overall I thought this read very well, with some lovely uses of language that sketched in an engaging, unsettling background to the story.
Narratively, it was also neat to read a VN in this game jam that gives us a third person's glimpse of a relationship rather than placing the point-of-view character's own romantic relationship(s) at the front of our attention. That aspect also makes this function powerfully as a self-contained short story, which is sensible scoping for a time-limited jam, as well…