You had some cool ideas in this submission and I can definitely tell you wanted to go for something that was more crunchy and dissonant. As someone who knows some musical theory, I think there's a more balanced way you could approach creating that dissonance. Even when you're composing really dissonant sounding music, it works best if you have a key in mind that you're trying to compose around and then adding careful tension and release. You did a really good job breaking the rules though and taking lots of risks.