Hey! Thank you for the kind words, and the helpful feedback.
I've just gone through and fixed all the issues you listed. Appreciate you taking the time to list them. And super glad you like Galka; she's one of my favorite characters to write, as she flips the script on you. She's the only one who you're not trying to solve a problem for. She's solving YOURS. And I don't see that a lot in this genre.