The VN shows promise. There are some cozy vibes and some very nice sprites and illustrations, though you can definitely tell the project was rushed because of the jam deadline (there is little music, the story isn't finished, the backgrounds feature some modern structures, etc.).
The biggest problem for me though is that the largest chunk of the wordcount is devoted to exposition which isn't thrilling to read and goes nowhere. Maybe the rest of the story will make use of all these worldbuilding elements, but even then, I can't help but feel this wasn't the best way to introduce them. The more character-driven central scene is nice, but all the surrounding fat detracts a bit IMHO.