Post by Clark Padmore in Eighth Day Kishimoto-kun comments

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Wow!! The soundtrack is phenomenal: a nice mix of soothing jazz and bittersweet synth. The upbeat tracks capture that "good day feeling" well, and the melancholic tracks are a great fit for the exploration of purpose. I will certainly look forward to your future composition work!

I liked the story! The main three characters balance each other well, and Kishimoto's gradual drift towards connection and friendship is heartwarming. The prose is good, and the fantastical elements are a fun addition to the game's themes.

My only negative note is that the ending was quite baffling to me; the stakes seemed a bit extreme, and I'm not sure how well it fits with the rest of the story.

Regardless, I really enjoyed this kinetic novel. It's a fantastic showcase of your skills as a composer and writer.

Great work!

cattymations24 days ago (3 edits) (+1)

100% agree with your claims here and really appreciate your feedback!

The first half of the game is something I'm very proud of and don't see much need for improvement, though the second half, while not awful, is needlessly rushed and way too fast.

While I personally like the ending, I can understand why some might not, considering the first half of the game is mainly just slice-of-life containing comedic banter between the characters and Kishimoto's introspective inner monologues.

This was my first time writing a proper story and I've improved a lot since and the next visual novel that I'm currently working on is definitely going to be a lot better! Though I definitely want to come back to this story some day and maybe even re-write it, as I think the concept is creative and the characters are likeable. Maybe I could slow the pace down, make the game longer, have the eighth day be a bigger part of the story and introduce more characters as the game goes along!

I'm beyond happy that you not only played my game and enjoyed it, but also took time to leave such valuable feedback!

Thanks!

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