Not a fan of the quasi-furry artwork, I must admit.
But the story itself seem pretty good.
The POV of someone other than the main character reveals a little bit -too- much. I am not a fan of a secondary POV in novels or visual novels. They tend to take out the mystery of the story and interrupt the flow of the storytelling.
It's a pretty big spoiler in this story. Too big.
The hint you get from the news and asking that customer about his troubles put together would have been subtle and nice.
Adding his POV after is like being hit in the fact with a sledghammer of a clue --it's too much.
Cute. But too much.
(Perhaps a later shadowed figure sequence -after- you've met all the characters in the story who says those things.... that might have worked. Kept the mystery alive.
The yandere POV directly after meeting said person ran a bit too long, but overall it wasn't bad. The second POV from him was very good. But again; Too revealing.)
Those minor flaws aside, this story is most defiantly wonderful.
Good enough that I can ignore the artstyle I dislike. And any minor flaws.
(I know, I nitpick. A lot. I'm a writer myself, so I always critique stories. lol)
I hope there will be a full version of this game somewhere.
Preferably on Steam.
It's the only place I actually buy games.
If it shows up on Steam, it defiantly goes on my wishlist.