Great read! I absolutely love the perspective shift! With the size constraints it’s tough but I think you pulled it off well. Obviously would have loved to see that dynamic go on a bit more, but there is something there about how abrupt the chaos tone shifts back to calmness I enjoyed. It perfectly captures a car crash. It’s all noise and scary one second, and the next your just laying on the road (or at least that was my experience hahaha).
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My last car accident was more of the “Oh… Ok.. I was rear ended.. That happened… OK.. What was the thing to do here? Oh… Look at that.. Homie’s driving off… Well… That just happened.” I think the constraints helped here more than hurt. I only had so much space to get an idea across. someone mentioned this feeling like a joke with the first half being the setup the second half being the punchline. I saw it that way as well. And if I’m being honest, history (especially military history) is like that. Some group of really competent people spend weeks planning a mission, going over every eventuality and possibility when they get on the objective, only to have a cat leaping in one key guys face throw the hole thing sideways. Or, for a more hilarious example, “LEROY JENKINS!!!!”