Concepts & Originality 5/5
This is an interesting look into a character's method of warfare. Very cool way to explore a faction and some creative storytelling going on.
Flow & Clarity 2/5
I like the use of first person present tense, but I think the story gets a little muddled in the transition to third person narrative in the latter half. Is the character narrating the action on 3rd person, or is it a different scene? There are a handful of grammatical errors that can be cleaned up in an editing pass, the most jarring are a few sentences that switch to past tense. I'm on the fence between 2 and 3 stars for this category, so I may revise my rating to 3 upon further reflection.
Adherence to Theme 5/5
Interesting to use mental conditioning/control/silence as the "resource" of the story. Very creative, and I appreciate the focus on it throughout.
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