Concepts & Originality 5/5
I'm pretty blown away by this. The story jumps right into the action, is gripping, and the premise is great.
Flow & Clarity 5/5
I'm very impressed how clearly the narrative flows despite its backwards progression and frequent scene breaks. Also, the blow-by-blow combat is done very well, fast-paced and evocative. You done very good. There's some pretty minor grammatical/punctuation errors that need to be cleaned up, but I'm going to give a 5/5 anyways.
Adherence to Theme 5/5
The story is focused around the theme and handles it in a very interesting way. Great.
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