The interactions between the student and professor are a bit heavy-handed, albeit not entirely unrealistic. The departure from wanting recognition for scholarly excellence to "[give me what I want and burn the rest]" is somewhat... odd. I take it our "heroine" may have not been the most pure soul in the first place, but I don't consider that a mark against the story. Overall it had a good pace and flow, barring the six month time skip during which I cannot fathom what bridged the gap between those two scenes.
Viewing post in Mightier - OPR Writing Jam #12 Submission jam comments
Thank you for your feedback! I would have preferred to take a lighter touch RE: Orsinia's interactions with her advisor, but I feel that in a story of this length it's hard to find a subtlety that works with the pacing and is still picked up on by most readers. I was waffling on the time skip myself; do you think it would have been better to leave it out completely? Would that have tightened up the story while still making the conclusion, well, conclusive?