I can't say it does much for the main theme, nor does it maintain clarity very well, but there's something here. There's a strong idea that could/should be further explored.
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Thank you for commenting. I expect that clarity to be my weakest point, no surprise there, about the theme I expected to have achieved better, but well, I'll have to work more.
If you are interested to check them, I tried to link all my submissions in different opr writing jam, if loosely, in a "meta-theme", . Although i am afraid they could be even less clear to follow.