No problem! I know how much feedback means to me and am happy to help out where I can.
3. Just something to think on! Also OSR doesn't really mean much haha... it's really a grab bag.
5. Hmmm I tend to see think success should happen 55-60% of the time. In really deadly systems, like 40%. But try increasing the luck pools first!
Tokens: I think most folks will get it. But if you think it's important for your system (and can find the space), I'd include it. Answer as many questions as the reader might have before they ask them.
But for real, keep working on this! A solid first game.