Hi !
Thank you for your answer. I'll edit the post. The story is about our collapsing world. How should call it ?
As long as you don’t overdo it, you can always ask your friends for feedback - especially if it’s not much to read. As long as they don’t say something along the lines of “Yeah, that sounds good…” their opinions will give you a better idea what works and what doesn’t.
… You might also find out which of your friends are terrible liars. ;)