Wow, what a ride! This was really fascinating to read. First of all, I love how expressive your characters are, especially the protagonist. I appreciated the expressive dialogue choices a lot; they were rich and interesting and I got to play Dorian like a total jerk, which was fun. The story's overall pacing is also pretty spot-on. It feels like the narrative spirals out of control, which reflects the main character's gradual decline toward insanity. I really can't think of anything to critique off the top of my head. Fantastic story!! Loved it!!!