Our game is rather short right now, but here are a few playtest questions:
How did the story make you feel?
How did the art and music affect your experience?
How did you feel about the choices?
Where do you expect the story to lead?
Other feedback?
I felt like the scene was set well, both with the background drawing and monologue for context. The (really cool!) face drawings seemed like a dissociation, which helped convey the familiar zoom-class emotion. I think having the beginning be quieter (or have no music at all) would make the music you do keep feel more impactful, because breaking silence with music indicates that something suspenseful is going on. I liked the choice of staring out the window or continuing to pay attention to class, because it felt important. But it felt like the class was the same length as the prelude, which was strange because the zoom class seems more important. It might help to add another choice during the zoom class, maybe? even an expressive one. I think something strange is definitely going to happen, maybe with time? like a huge lapse of time will suddenly pass, to the protagonist's dismay. I first got this feeling from being late to the zoom class (nice touch!).