Hi,
First: Thanks for all the feedback, truly!
I've fixed the typos and grammars errors here listed for the eventual fix patch.
As for Robert's and Sebastian's names they're done as such on purpose to kind of remove some personality from them, and put the focus on the others.
The lightning effect seems to be there, but it's a very quiet one as it's supposed to be distant. I'll bring it up a little for the next version.
Once again, thanks, and thanks for reading the story! Much appreciated!