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What do you mean unclear and forced?

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"Prepare a meal" is a bit formal, "did you cook something?" or "did you make some grub?" would feel a bit more natural, for example. 

"Rodents and Rabbits were in huge misunderstandings with Foxes" is also a bit odd grammatically, "Rodents and Rabbits had big misunderstandings about Foxes" reads a bit better. 

But I get the idea of the story pretty well, and the characters are pretty interesting! I hope we get to see more of them!

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oh yeah thanks for the advices! As myself and the one that helps me for the grammar aren't native english speakers it's something that can happen sadly


And thanks ^^ next update will, if everything goes well, be tomorrow!