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Great Concept, Story and Backgrounds! 

You mentioned that you forgot all about the deadline but if I didn't know that beforehand I really wouldn't be able to tell the difference because the ending was wrapped up pretty perfectly.

The only criticism I can point is that the dialogue was a bit redundant at points and the grammar was iffy in some places but that's about it.

Looking forward to whatever you come up with in the future!

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Thank you so much for the feedback! I have learned from your comment and others that I need to take more care of grammar and need to be checking all routes of a non-linear story so that I can avoid redundancy! I appreciate your critisism and hope to get better at writing english stories in the future!