Loving the story, Fire.
Just got to ask a question, the scene where MC says the "...you'll see me staring back at you" bit, is that a reference to Dune where Paul Atreides has a pop at the Benejzerat Mother? Cos if it is, top show old chap.
I was ok with the original movie, have reread the novel MANY times, but compared to Villanueve's version, David Lynch's Dune was kinda a disjointed acid trip. That being said, I also thought of Paul when I got to that scene, so much so that I nearly went back and renamed MC to Paul. :) Eagerly awaiting the public release on Monday, as I am strapped and unfortunately cannot afford the extra for a Patreon