woah thank you for the thourough review :)
I think I'm going to leave this piece as it is, it's my journal of thoughts about this jam when I decided to abandon doing anything and poemified in an interactive way and I admit that I did't give it much more thought other than the fact that I once again had the energy and the willing to create something/anything ^^'
but your feedback defnitely gives me ideas on how to implement similar-but-diffrent poems in the future :)
especially given that confronted with the same situation our feelings change, and interactive poem can convey that. also I think of how music and visuals could help express emotions better. it's true that with interactivity it's possible to go a long way further.