Absolutely beautiful. I'd call this something even beyond a visual novel... it's a visual poem. A soliloquy brought to life.
What's really interesting about this to me is just how seeing the character and the stars in the background really brought the cryptic words of love to life and really added an emotion to them. I admit, if I were to read the text of this soliloquy on its own without the visuals, I might have gotten a bit lost in the more cryptic parts. But having it broken down line by line while so perfectly setting the mood through the music and art... makes the reader feel one with the character.
Just absolutely brilliant. Yes, it's short, but that's the way it needs to be. Because that's the way poetry is. Short-lived, like a moonlit flower dancing only while the darkness comfortably cloaks it from the busyness of day. (that came out of nowhere, haha. Still in a poetic mood after that expiereince! xD)
In a day and age of fast paced tech and stuff where poetry is kinda being seen as like a dated thing... stuff like this could totally bring it back in a whole new way, with just as much beauty and a whole new level of understanding. Please keep doing what you're doing! I can't wait to see what other poetic emotions you bring to life next.
Really, really good stuff. Amazing work.
-Sasha
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Hello! Thank you so very much for your kind words!!
And thank you for the feedback as well! I really appreciate it! I have to admit I was nervous about my writing since it’s a little unusual for a visual novel. I’ve always loved poetry and it really shows when I write so sometimes things can get very abstract and flowery haha. I’m really glad you enjoyed it!
Of course! <3
and hey, anything is possible with visual novels. You're the writer, you get to write it your way! Especially through beautiful poetry! :)
I actually looovvveee poetry too, especially for the rhymes and rhyme scheme. I even snuck some of that into our game xD If you have time to give it a try... I'd love your feedback as well! :D
-Sasha