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"Zoe adopted at age 5, sold to a villa to relieve millionaire men seeking intimacy with young girls. Captive ever since, Zoe turned 9, and once again she and 15 other girls who live with her were abused. She receives, in her dreams, a visit from a spirit that shows her (porqué mudasteis de sujeto?) an entire outside world that is being lost (or "is dying")."

Esto me parece una traducción más y correcta y fiel a lo (que me parece) que queriais decir.

Podéis usarla tal cual si queréis.

I did it for the sport.

dy22 years ago

I think "is being lost" should probably be "she is missing" (I believe she's the subject of "se está perdiendo").

I agree about the subject change sounding a little off. "que le muestra" might be a better choice ("that shows her").

bitesh2 years ago (1 edit)

No, actually, I'm pretty sure it's the world that's being lost. Should she be the subject, do you think she's missing the world? As in missing out? I guess it could be, but that's not how it came across to me.

dy22 years ago(+1)

I think what motivates her to get out is to go to a better place. Unless she's out for revenge against a corrupted world, helping the spirit more than herself.

In this case, English conveys the intended meaning and maybe the Spanish version could use a little fix. "Perdiendo" where? In what?

E.g., "le muestra [] un mundo exterior que se está perdiendo [en valores, corrupción, avaricia]", "un mundo decadente".

For the other meaning, "le muestra (todo) [el] mundo exterior que se está perdiendo".

I don't mean to be dense (sorry if I come off that way), I just enjoy analyzing meanings. Since we both seem to know Spanish and understood it differently, I think we can agree that it isn't entirely clear.

ReveVoodoo2 years ago(+1)

Zoe's story continues in Dismember mind 2 and 3, as for the translation, don't give it a second thought, it is simply translated automatically and there may be both grammatical errors and the concept itself, even so, I appreciate the analysis, and that even there are people playing it *__+

bitesh2 years ago(+1)

I guessed as much, but I thought you might want to use a more polished translation. I couldn't help myself, coz that's what I do, but it's not really important.

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